You wanna see if your writing is overweight? A friend of mine turned me on to the Writer's Diet. This is a fun and interesting way to see where your deficiencies lie in your writing. Simply copy a portion of your story and run the test. You can get an analysis in PDF form or just view it on the screen.
The analysis you receive states your writing is either of the following: lean, fit and trim, needs toning, flabby or heart attack territory. It is quite funny but also a good guide when you are not sure of how to write. I love this website and will be using it in the future. Hope you enjoy.